Review

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Guatemala July 7 of 2011

Julio Asturias

Roble´s Principal

Mr. Asturias it is very important for the students to have clubs in the school. You know the development of the students is essential for the rest of their life(lives) because it stimulate(stimulates) all the skills that the students need. A way to make that stimulate(stimulation) real is created(creating) more clubs in the school. In the school are so many clubs for example the reading club, the writing club and the sport club. Some students ask me if it is possible to make a new club in the school. This proposal is about making the arts club because it will create stimulation to the students and reputation to the school.

The stimulation is very important to the people who like arts because it will create opportunities, hobbies, and goals for the students. The opportunities that the students can get will be express(expressing) themselves in the way that they thing(think) for example painting a picture. A lot of people in this school like to paint and if you create this club you will create in them the habit to paint more (and acquire a beneficial hobby rather than having them wasting their time). Finally, some students (can) have a very important goal in their lives that(which) it is(could) be (becoming) famous artists.

Each day others schools are growing (in popularity) and we will(can) not stay back(behind) them(,)(.) the reputation(Reputation) is very important because the school will have more students (and the club can get the school have a better reputation by 1, 2, and 3)(,)(.) the school fees can rise, and the school could be number one in Guatemala. The reputation makes that more students want to be with us in our school and that will be very good for the school. If you have a reputation, you will get more school fees and that will be incredible economically for the school. Obviously making the club could put the school in number one in Guatemala because we will be the only school that has all the clubs in only one school.

Mr. Asturias don´t way(wait) so(for a) much(long) time to answer this important proposal because we want the best for this school. As you see(,) that making the club will create(improve) a lot of things for example the stimulation for the guys and the reputation for the school. We could have the best artist(artists) in a couple of years. The teacher could be the Mr. Chema because he is very smart and has a lot of skills to be a good guide of that club. You will see that a lot of students will want to be part of that club. You have the decision in your hands(,)(;) you will see the results very soon. Respond as soon as possible to star building the place (what????????) that will have the art´s club.

Gustavo Hernandez

Student´s President